Web Weaver
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I liked the story, the build up. What I didn't like were the grammatical errors, the punctuation errors, sentence structure was a bit odd in some places. Sometimes I had to backtrack to figure out who was speaking, lack of he said/ she said. The sex scenes were very unmoving. The outline could make a fantastic series, needs an overhaul with a better editor and proofreader. This review coming from someone who usually looks the other way when seeing typos in PlayBooks. I really want to know what happens next, but that would mean purchasing, and I'm not feeling the need to give my money to people who are obviously in the wrong career.
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Tina Marie Rath
This definitely deserves 5 stars! It is a great story with real-seeming characters. Just like me, wanting love but not being lucky at finding it. They, however, are much luckier than me, they found each other. A totally unique (to me) storyline with an awesome ending. I hope I get to read the rest of the series, it promises to be awesome!
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Sharon
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I enjoyed the story and am glad I took the time to read it. The problem was the editing. Really bad. Sometimes it was hard to know who was talking. He's and she's mixed up. Other problems. I'm interested in the next book though. The main story arc was complete but there is an overall arc that continues from book to book. So there are questions that aren't answered yet. This story is standalone but I don't know if you need to read this one to read the next.
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